Is there a children pick pocketing gang in
By Maria and Maria
Yesterday happened something terrible in front of the bookstore “THE BOOK” in the
It was the 5th of April, a totally normal day, when this wicked delict took place. George Smith, a big rich man, visited the bookstore to buy some new books for his collection. The owner of the bookstore Mr. Miller saw some little boys hanging around at “THE BOOK”, like the other customers. After a few minutes Mr. Miller noticed that 2 boys stole an expensive beautiful handkerchief from George Smith’s pocket. The boys ran away and at this moment Mr. Smith descried that someone has stolen his beloved handkerchief. He looked around and saw a little boy who was standing behind him and then suddenly ran away. All people on the street chased this little boy and after he was caught, he was taken to court. The judge wanted to punish the boy, who was called Sam Waters, badly, but suddenly Mr. Miller arrived at the court. He explained, that it had not been Sam Waters, who had stolen that handkerchief, and that he had seen, that two other boys had stolen it out of Mr. Smith’s pocket. Mr. Miller told us, “How could I permit, that a little boy should come into jail, if he didn’t do anything wrong?” So, the little boy got free, but the real committer of this crime has not been found yet. The question, if there’s a pick pocketing gang of young boys in
1 comment:
WO: yesterday something terrible happened --> A(T) S P O
date: April 5 / 5th April
Delikt = crime, offence
WO: a beautiful expensive ...
t: that someone had stolen .... (Don't use present perfect with past tense!)
exp: all people in the street
No comma before "that"!
the perpetrator of the crime
the question .... has not been resolved yet
Note: You have a very long second paragraph, but you should also be able to write other paragraphs in which you present what witnesses said. However, you put quite some effort into this task.
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